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File: 1462941451069.jpg (121.05 KB, 730x826, Fertile Valley.jpg)

a9e58 No.159

Like many fans of Jim Davis’ erotica I’ve been waiting for a continuation of Fertile Valley for, admittedly, far too long. Davis wrote 12 chapters, and unfortunately never returned to the story. For years I’ve toyed with the idea of continuing the erotica, postponing it until now. I haven’t made a complete outline yet, but I’m thinking of adding seven/eight chapters, giving the story a proper end.

Note that - like the original - the story will have pregnancy, incest, pre-teen (consensual) sex, breast/penis expansion and cum inflation. If any of these are not to your liking, perhaps this work is not for you. This is a work of fiction and is by no means a justification of pedophilia.

Davis' original: http://www.asstr.org/~Kristen/fv/
My continuation:
http://www.pregnantxxxforum.com/viewtopic.php?f=18&t=9477

Please let me know what you think, and share any ideas/comments you have. I hope you enjoy the story.

89d79 No.160

>>159
Wow. I applaud you for the effort. I too had always felt that it was a shame he had never finished that story, and while I didn't have the time to read all of your new chapter, what I DID read was very promising indeed! I'll have to finish the chapter before I give any real feedback, but things are great so far!

d271d No.161

Hell hath fucking frozen over. I never thought I'd see the day THIS would be continued. Shock aside, the story seems well written and flows nicely with the original. I don't think there was quite as much cum inflation though, but that might just be you're own personal thing and I ain't gonna split hairs when you're bringing this back.

caa1e No.162

True, I put the cum inflation in there as my own personal taste. I don't feel it fits with the original characters though, so I don't think I'll use it to such extremes again. I'm glad so far it's too your liking.

39892 No.163

I remember Randy Dave, his name is Jim Davis?

Not the same Jim Davis who created Garfield right?

89d79 No.164

>>163
I think randy dave is just an artist (who liked drawing for Jim Davis time to time), and Jim is most certainly not the garfield one. Common enough name.

>>162
Anyway, now that I've read the rest, I can see the similarities between the old one and yours, though so far, I'd say the old one focuses more on his family and the temptations involved. Like, he'd often see especially pregnant girls going about, but they'd often end up reminding him of his own family, and how they had been growing with every passing week.

c21f1 No.165

Yes, I agree how my chapter differs from the rest. I wrote it that way on purpose, both as a bridge between stories as well as to see how it would be to everyone else.

If people would dislike it, I would at least not have 'ruined' the original characters. I intend to focus on the family and the 'science' of Fertile Valley in the upcoming chapters.

I do, however, understand why it is difficult to continue this path; Bill, the father, has given in to his temptation in Davis' last chapter. Perhaps he struggled having to move on from that point? I certainly am still drafting the outline.

f5788 No.166

Sure, he gave into temptation once. But now he has to slowly succumb to the fertile valley way of thinking full tim

769a7 No.169

He does succumb to his carnal desire towards in chapter 12 of the original, but Davis writes Bill as someone who pursues the science behind things; plus, towards the end of chapter 12, he mentions the involvement of both the welfare department and the FBI; implying the research has wider-spreading effects than just a "scientist gone crazy with lust" story. Bill has, after all, not been in the valley for generations, but rather a few months.

That's my interpretation, however. I am drafting a version where Bill and his family are obviously erotically affected by the going-ons in the valley, but will still have a satisfying, logical ending, rather than spiraling down into sex-crazed oblivion. To do that, the preacher will have to have a part to play, of which I'm not certain yet exactly how…

48e3d No.170

True. It's such a shame he ended the story on such a foreboding note. It really restricts how it can be continued. But you're doing great work, and honestly as long as it involves massive pregnancies it'll please me. Do you have any plans for how many his daughters are carrying? I've always thought it would be great to see Megan (meagen?) With 6-8

386e6 No.172

I am finding ways to handle the foreboding conclusion of chapter 12. Perhaps I take it too seriously, but I analyzed the text, which food/items are mentioned to have drug-enhanced effects, what those effects are, etcetera. The effects in of the drugs are accelerated more in the younger girls/boys, which I keep in mind.

I have made a table of breast-size per chapter, per daughter (and Peggy/Maggie) too, to deduce the rate of growth.

And yes, all the (main) girls (including wife Peggy/nurse Maggie) will get massively pregnant. Meagan, indeed, will be the absolute biggest of them all, and will be quite a focus point.

465c4 No.173

Sounds promising and good massive pregnancy stories are very rare so I'm very much looking forward to this.

adacd No.177

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I have finished the next chapter (chapter 14) and put it online. Please find it here:
http://www.pregnantxxxforum.com/viewtopic.php?f=18&t=9477&p=117004&sid=a8d934b53dbf35f0ed672522766b2a96#p117004

I hope you will enjoy it. On a different note, should I open a new thread in the Chat section - or should a moderator move this thread? I suppose, this being a story, it fits better in that section.

fc1a7 No.178

I am excited that you decided to continue where randy left off, I always wished this story continued, its one of my favorites. Just one request, keep it in line with how the author originally wrote it because the "other" continuation of it was not that good and went way overboard with other vanilla directions and it basically deviated so much it wasn't even the same story anymore.

4e22e No.179

>>178
I don't think that'll be a problem. There's a difference in style, yeah, but I feel like it still complements the style of the original.

b0aa1 No.180

A definite improvement over the first chapter. Not to say the first chapter was bad, but this chapter feels like a great continuation of the original story as opposed to the first's side story with similar themes. (Which I know was on purpose so you could get a feel for them)

I can't wait to see what you write next!

6ab3d No.182

>>177
Very good. Im really excited for the next chapter.

818d1 No.183

Not too shabby at all. :)

Is there a possibility of a birth scene in a future chapter?

8ba96 No.184

Thank you all for the continued support.

Yes, there will be a birth scene in a later chapter. Who it is giving birth in detail I have not yet decided. I'm also not certain on how to write the erotic aspect of birth; I'll have to read some other works to get more ideas.

Please note that I will be on holiday for a month, so I will finish the upcoming chapter likely end of July.

bc5e8 No.188

>>184
the easiest way to introduce a birth scene would simply have him watch a birth at the hospital he works at. he's already studying the sperm and eggs, might as well study how exactly the young girls of fertile valley are pushing out their multiples so easily

a584b No.191

God damn that was awesome. Can't wait for more chapters And hope to see a lot more filling, love what happened with the cute asian girl. Hope she shows up more often.

79041 No.196

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I have finished the next chapter (chapter 15) and put it online. Please find it here:

http://www.pregnantxxxforum.com/viewtopic.php?f=18&p=121048#p121048

I hope you will enjoy it. Side note: if anything knows of a different erotica site this could be posted, please let me know. Do note the site must be ok with pre-teen pregnancies.

fc1a7 No.197

Might I suggest looking up an author by the name of Big Al on the asst, he puts his email on his stories, maybe you can ask him where to post since he posts stuff along this line.

ab9f4 No.200

>>196
If everybody is already looking full term 3 months in I really doubt this is gonna be better later. When you exaggerate it this much it's just meh.

You could've at least gotten the characters pregnant on different stages, instead all of them are pretty much the same.

Meh

ab9f4 No.201

>>196
If everybody is already looking full term 3 months in I really doubt this is gonna be better later. When you exaggerate it this much it's just meh.

You could've at least gotten the characters pregnant on different stages, instead all of them are pretty much the same.

Meh

7efaf No.202

Personally I'm in favor of the story delving into hyperpreg territory since it read like that's what the original was progressing towards anyway.

Having said that I hope you keep it grounded; make sure to document those struggles with lowered mobility and enforced bed rest once they go past the point of no return.

60c6c No.203

Thank you for the comments, everyone.

I have, indeed, mulled over the growth aspect of their bodies, as well as the timing of their pregnancies. To me, continuing from the original, this seemed the most logical outcome; Jim Davis wrote of a 12-year old pregnant with triplets, whose belly distended 3 feet at full term, for instance. Nurse Maggie was showing at 6 weeks!

I know this is quite an exaggeration - and I understand that is not meant for everyone. That's ok, there are plenty of stories out there.

About struggles and bed rest: I'm not certain if it fits Davis' profile. I constantly re-read his chapters looking for clues on these aspects, but haven't found them, to be honest. Perhaps I'll find a middle way. Read Preteen Pregnancy, for instance, about hyper-pregnancy with all its ensuing complications; Fertile Valley has always seemed a more fantasy-like "care free" pregnant haven. Again, this is merely how I interpret things.

Keep sharing your thoughts, everyone. It helps greatly with the writing.

7efaf No.204

>>203
The main reason I was suggesting problems with mobility because was I seem to remember stories, if not by Davis than in similar veins, that had scenes of really pregnant girls that needed to be pushed around wheelchairs. That kind of thing seemed befitting of the tone.

fc1a7 No.205

The only thing I hate is when an author says someone has a huge pregnant belly and they are just pregnant with one or two children. that ain't huge! when I think of huge I think of 5+ kids. It would probably be awesome to see meagan become the new poster child as the most pregnant child for her age.

Regardless, you are doing an amazing job and it was apparent through Davis' writings that meagan was supposed to be the largest and most developed kid of the group so I am excited to see where it goes.

c2ad2 No.267

>>204
Agreed.
In fact, I read in Fertile Valley of when Davis's family went into a restaurant, and noticed another family walk in with heavily-pregnant young daughters that required assistance climbing into the booth.

14cee No.278

I'm also sort of interested in what is going to happen with his kids that have shown no interest in pregnancy. Are they a cure or are they going to transform at some point into massive versions out doing their siblings.

42b93 No.285

To me, the appeal of the series was in exploiting taboos. Once it becomes normalized and accepted, it becomes less erotic. Sort of. Even at the end of chapter 12 he was still trying to hide and suppress the intra-family relationships

Anyway, I hope a chapter is done where the protagonist discovers his daughters are pregnant, but we're past that point. Maybe a flashback

It just seems like a bummer since that was the fear that was hyped in the original 12 chapters and it get skipped here.

Still, general writing style is near-perfect

60c6c No.286

Thank you all for the comment and criticism; they help a lot in shaping the story.

I'll be honest, pregnomymous, that it had not occurred to me the taboo played a part of the excitement. It may very well have been the reason Davis chose not to continue. I'm not certain if a flashback would do the memory of initial pregnancy honor; I'll give it a whirl in the next (next) chapter.

As for the non-pregnant daughters; they are going to play a pivotal role both in plot as well as Bill's character development. There will be a turning point of sorts in chapter 17. It is tricky - writing a narrative to appeal to both the plot-driven mind as well as the horny-driven mind…

39e53 No.287

>>286
Now that I think about it, did Jim do any other works, or was Fertile Valley the only one?

481c0 No.288

>>287
I honestly can't find anything on Jim Davis besides Fertile Valley. Unfortunately it seems like that was Davis' only work.

39e53 No.289

>>288
Huh.
Well, that's a bit of a pity.

fc1a7 No.290

I don't know who did this but on chili palmer's story annex there are some stories Babycakes and Born to Breed, Daddy's not so little girl. one I know is by jim davis the other are by anonymous and debbiedoubled

http://www.bearchive.com/~chili/

thats the link to the story pages.

2fde3 No.311

G-force, can we get an update on when chapter 16 might be posted?

fc1a7 No.315

Hey y'all chapter 16 is up on pregnantxxxforum check it out!

a584b No.318

Can't reply on the forum so i'll do it her. Love how big ever ones getting and hope that keeps up.

Rather looking forward to that Japanese lady come around again for another filling. Pumping her up so huge in that scene was great. Surprised it hasn't happened to any of the other girls yet.

fc1a7 No.365

New chapter up, check-it!

7efaf No.367

I know that tvtropes says that writers have no sense of scale and god knows I'm guilty of liking impossibly huge pregnancies but I gotta wonder if he's thought this one out fully because I did some of the math and…wow.
A girl of Megan's stated age and smaller than average height is going to (assuming a healthy weight) weigh, about 44, 45 pounds.
FV babies are, despite being multiples, said to be akin to singletons in terms of healthy birth weight. So that's eight pounds per baby give or take some ounces. We could even be charitable and lowball that to 7.
She's having octuplets. So that's between 56 to 64 pounds. That's just the babies. They'd collectively outweigh their mother by a minimum of 10 pounds. See where I'm going with this yet?
Then you add the weight of the placenta and the amniotic fluid, of which there's said to be a lot of. The math here gets a little hazy but round numbers are fun so let's say between 60 and 70 pounds for total womb weight.
That means that at full term the contents of Megan's womb would outweigh the rest of her body by an approximate minimum of between 15 to 25 pounds. To put it another way her pregnancy adds an additional 130 to 150% to her total weight.

I'm not sure how to translate that into physical dimensions but it seems like her belly could easily end up bigger than the rest of her. And that's before you account for the breasts or any other overall weight gain.

fc1a7 No.370

I mean thats good calculation, but this is also fiction, so I mean its going to jump the shark a few times. plus in consideration of the fact that this is supposed to be an erotic story there are going to be situations that seem unrealistic but will still be ideal because that would go against the aims of the theme.

4aa34 No.371

Jeez, that last bit got really dark. Still anexcellent chapter.

7efaf No.373

>>370
You misunderstand. I'm saying that's what I want.

fc1a7 No.375

>>373
Ah, I thought you may have been pointing out a problem with it. yes I too love really huge baby bumps, I hope that near the end they discover that meagan has a few more babies in her. :P

a584b No.414

What the fucking shit was with that end there? Why did you suddenly feel the need to go DRAMA DARK RAAAA. What the shit?

7efaf No.415

>>414
It fits the original. There were constant aside to talk about the taboo nature of the town and how fucked up everything was from an outsider's perspective.

0258f No.416

>>415
Exactly.

a584b No.417

That has nothing to do with the father in the fic. For the entire thing the most his done is light flirting and taunting. His never pressed hard or forced anything at all or has gotten close to that. The girls around him have started ever thing.

So this suddenly attempted rape scene does not fit and is only added to stir up drama or some shit. Wrecking ever thing before it.

73006 No.428

>>417

I have to agree. It's a really abrupt tonal shift from everything that's come before.

c9331 No.429

>>428
The story always had taboo overtones, as it constantly features the father fighting against his urges. Though, I'm interested in seeing how the two oldest daughters start sexually experimenting, I kind of think the first of the "new" chapters was too much of a timeskip. Besides that the general writing quality is good, even if the dimensions discussed get kind of absurd

2dc92 No.435

I am going to assume for all intents and purposes you don't mean the Jim Davis behind Garfield…

2fde3 No.443

Gforce, can we get an update on chapter 18? Its been almost two months since chapter 17 was posted, just wanted to see if the next chapter was ready or close to ready

98dc9 No.483

new chapter up, dig it!

9b6f4 No.672

>>483
Any idea when you're gonna have Chapter 19 finished?

06d69 No.673

>>672
He said it would be up by the end of this weekend but no response. we just gotta wait.

6b743 No.684

Hmmm. Seems like page 7 of that thread lost some posts. There definitely a few messages suggesting GeForce set up a Patreon that are now missing.

06d69 No.685

>>684

I noticed this too, I hope this doesn't send an omen of things to come. or maybe the original user deleted those posts. idk.

5f233 No.686

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>>685

As far as I can tell, the site crashed and the power(s) that be reverted to a backup. I created an account to post on it the day before, and now my post *and account* no longer exist. Image shows missing posts (thank you VisualPing!), except for my own.

I still hold out hope, though!

a3bdf No.687

>>686
I was thinking some kind of server issue. Thanks for digging deeper

06d69 No.688

I'm starting to think the pregnantxxx forum is having some issues. it says my account is now inactive for some reason and I cannot log in anymore. and earlier when I tried to send a pm to GeForce it said this user does not exist. so I dont know what is going on.

06d69 No.700

Chapter 19 is up!

6b743 No.701

Great stuff. Thanks a lot for continuing this classic series, g-force.

b1c45 No.707

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Hello everyone,

I'm sorry for not having posted here in quite a while - I'm trying once more now, hoping the message comes through.

Thank you all for the support, criticism, and most of all, your patience. This story has been quite an undertaking: at times frustrating, but ultimately rewarding to write. I hope you enjoy (and have enjoyed) my contribution to Davis' fantastic original.

Chapter 19 is out, and with that monster out of the way only the epilogue remains.

For easy chapter browsing, go the the first page of the forum thread and click the designated links: http://www.pregnantxxxforum.com/viewtopic.php?p=115851#p115851

b4edf No.734

Final chapter.
Epilogue: Ten Years Later



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