Thanks for this aristo. I've seen a lot of cyoa threads but never an in-depth explanation of the writing process. You did the right thing not planning too heavily, and I'm glad we've been able to surprise you.
Have you found yourself writing faster as the quest's gone on? You must have sunk hundreds of hours into this by now and I'm wondering if the practice is sharpening your skills.
>Medieval sexual biology would not know what 'sperm' is…
Van Leeuwenhoek first observed spermatozoa in 1677, so it's not drastically out of place. His clever method of lens-making could easily had been discovered earlier. Okay, egg cells and what sperm actually do were a lot later.
So far I've thought of this world as somewhere between Medieval and Renaissance depending on location (cosmopolitan places eg Veneta vs backwaters eg Ruhemania) and what's convenient for the story. It won't be a big deal unless a technology could resolve a plot point and we're not sure if it exists or not.
>I also must find pictures to post.
For my part I don't mind if there isn't a picture for every update. It's fun to have, especially for a sex scene, but you shouldn't feel obligated every time.
On that topic, do you have picture references for what the male characters look like?
I hesitate to say I find any part of writing Impregnator Kings 'easy' or 'more easy'… but I will say that I feel I don't have to 'worry' so much now.
When I was first writing the story, I was terrified I'd fail to include an important detail that I would rely on later, or that I would contradict what was established in the story because of some accident or carelessness. This hasn't happened, and I don't worry so much about this anymore.
As for picture references for the male characters, I started out planning characters this way, and Ricardo was given that name from the Ricardo in Haunting Ground/Demento that Daniella's portrait was also used from and originally I was going to use portraits from there for him too. I decided eventually against using any portraits for males. As for what Edward looks like, I do give some details (his preferred hair style was described in one update), but I try not to give anything too concrete so the reader can more easily imagine the details they like themselves. Subjective descriptions like "He's handsome, fit, and well-built" are much better to illustrate him than specific qualities, which someone may not think are "handsome" at all.
I have thought about the festival and I think it would be a good opportunity to announce Tharja's pregnancy publicly.
We have a lot if not all of Ruhemania's important people in one place including anyone who might still be opposed to Edward's rule. Announcing that the Edwardian dynasty has already started will derail some possible plots. For example: All but the most ruthless adversaries will hesitate to simply kill Edward in order to move the ruling power back to Vlad's family if it means that an innocent child would have to be killed too.
The reactions to such an announcement will also give us clues as to who is on our side and who isn't. Of course that's nowhere near definitive, but a small clue is better than nothing.
Small Bonus: The announcement will plant the idea of pregnancy in the minds of all visiting women making them a bit more open to seduction.
Conversely, announcing her pregnancy publicly may make other women less likely to sleep with us if they think that they might be breaking up a budding family (even though Tharja is totally into all of that).
Just to be sure, please feel free to continue to suggest any last-chance possible requests for scenes. I intend to address them all.
I hope it's enjoyable.
These last two sex scenes were really fun, aristo :)
I absolutely love Elizabeth's submissiveness. I know, it's not everyone's favourite idea to have Elizabeth be a sex slave, but I for one really like it and look forward to sex scenes with her.
And having Edward so preoccupied with Beatrice that he didn't even hear the maid enter was hot and hilarious at the same time. :) Keep up the good work!
Thank you very much! I'm always eager to hear feedback. Especially on the sex scenes because what is sexy is so subjective.
Thanks for always making sure to touch on the suggestions and inclusions from the audience, even if they are just brief asides or flavor text. Keep on keeping on, author Aristocrat.
Thank you very much. I always try to do this, for several reasons.
1. They are usually good ideas! They help me keep my brain thinking about the plot and the world and I am usually thinking "I should have thought of addressing that."
2. Even if they aren't 'good' ideas (meaning, viable), I can usually address 'why' they aren't possible in the story, and reveal a little more about the world or a character's motivations at the same time.
One example I think is that very early in the game, someone wrote about Edward possibly finding out what was in the oubliette in the dungeon by lowering Tharja down there, since she was trustworthy enough to keep the secret, and possibly light enough for Edward to pull her back out. I considered this possibility, and although it may have been 'physically' possible for Edward strength-wise, he probably wouldn't go through with it because he would seriously risk injuring her in an accident and then he'd have no back-up plan if that happened. Still, I was thankful for this suggestion because it helped me reconsider the problem. (That is, I had framed it as 'who could Edward get to lower him in the oubliette?' but someone found a good possible solution by reversing it as 'who could Edward lower into the oubliette?' It ultimately wouldn't have solved the problem, but it helped me consider how to pose problems and account for possible solutions in the future.)
3. I want to keep the game 'fair'. That is, I want the reader to be able to approach a choice in the story with the same knowledge as Edward would have. If the reader notices something 'off' or something that might become a problem, then Edward should be able to investigate and act, too. With all the resources he has at hand.
Keep in mind, for every 'hard choice' that appears in the story that seems a really tough decision with subtle consequences, there have been many, many times where the readers have successfully found a good solution to something that could have become a problem before it became a dire situation. (I know what these are, but it's probably not obvious at first glance.)
Furthermore, in addressing suggestions and requests, it encourages more of them. Something which I really want to do for all of the above reasons.
I will close the vote on the latest choice and write the update tomorrow.
Thank you for following along with the story. I hope this illustrates I really mean it when I say 'you are writing the story with me'.
I hope it's enjoyable.
I know it's a joke, but just for the record, I am not Moe. I am writing Impregnator Kings and Impregnated Princess only.
Apologies also for the long time without an update. It was a combination of sickness and lacking creative energy.
Are you okay aristo? I haven't seen anything from you either here or on DeviantArt in more than a week.
I'm sorry so long has gone by without an update.
I think I mentioned it on my DA, but I have become involved in something recently that has taken up all of my creative attention, unlike anything I've been involved with since I started writing this story.
I mentioned earlier that the way I write Impregnator Kings is that I spend the day thinking of where the story will go, and then by the time I enter the evening, I usually have enough I can just start writing and be completely done in the time I have.
That is now not the case. I don't have the mental freedom to do this now. It is too much to wait until evening then try desperately to think and write at the same time.
The good news however is that this state is temporary and it is already slowing down. Soon I will have my usual freedom back again and updates will resume at their usual pace.
Apologies for everyone wondering where the next update is.
My DA will definitely also announce when I update or when it is near.
Long time no writing aristo,
Hopefully u get ur groove back
Will be waiting for that new update
While we're waiting for the update, let's do some discussion.
Have you ever wondered our route what it would have IF we married the other bachelorettes?
Been watching some Fate series, made me think deeply what Arturia's world would been like..
Absolutely. Although I think more about the queen Menace than Arturia. The egyptian theme sounded like huge orgies with a whole pregnant harem could have been a thing.
Nice one oz,
Anyone got a link to the beginning i cant find it some odd reason
I just get this nagging feeling we may still get a chance with at least one or two of the other girls, as at some point Edward will almost certainly have to try to build some relationships with nearby countries in order to gain allies and increase Ruhemania's overall relevance to the region (if Ruhemania becomes more prosperous in the meantime, that's a bonus), so someone like Arturia might not necessarily be out of play.
Still, since we're thinking about our dear witches right now, I kinda wish more of them survived than just Erika. Sounded like a couple of them might have made good harem material.
Well, Erika may not know if certain ones are really dead. If I remember correctly, she only specified that one was "definitely dead". This may imply that the other's fate is unknown and death was assumed. But, I may easily be overlooking something here.
I feel that if one of the potential spouses show up in this story, it may not be on the best of terms. We did seem to leave some hanging in odd predicaments since we did not choose them (Arturia, for example, wanted a child to help appease certain parties in her kingdom). Still, I would like to see how they are doing and get a second chance at them, if possible.
I feel that if we went down Arturia's path, we would have to be dealing with a person who may be a bit more distant and cold with us at the start than Tharja was, since her marriage with us was solely for the purpose of child-rearing with her and nothing more (if I remember correctly the proposal and the character in source material). And we may have been in charge of swaying certain (female) parties into being more willing to work with her. But that is simply my two cents on the matter.
Sorry for the wait from me.
I am trying very hard to get something written by the end of this weekend, even if it's just a little update without a dramatic choice it will be enough for me to start the 'routine' of updating every day again.
When the game reaches a new game+, I intend to have another vote for which wife to pursue next. This will likely be only between the top three or four wives. (So between Flora, Arturia, Alena, and perhaps either Deborah or Menace, if the audience really wants either of them.)
Ideally, we could progress through all potentials eventually. That was always my plan, if I am able and can keep them distinct.
I hope it's enjoyable.
Well, nothing the "Mad Rutting Beast" can't solve, right?
Also, I don't mind castle court politics and such, it helps stimulate my thinking.
But yeah, I guess Tharja was the softest among the candidates.
If aristo is still a little busy and while the main story is in a little hiatus right now, is anyone interested in having a spin-off?
I'm thinking of a more foreign policy oriented story line since so far we have been more or less confined to the castle (and the immediate surrounding). And correct me if I'm wrong, aristo, but I interpret the way the NPCs reacted when we tried something outwardly directed to mean that the whole story is also intended to stay inside the castle for the foreseeable future.
So why not have an outlet for our foreign policy desires in something like a military campaign? This would have the benefit of being somewhat closed. Victory/defeat would be a natural goal and ending for a story like that; would give it more structure.
Of course it would be set in a parallel universe as to not interfere with the main story (and I'm thinking some years in the relative future as well just to be on the safe side). And of course you, aristo, would have complete veto power.
I have thought about the beginnings of such campaign and even though I have never written anything like a CYOA before, I'd like to give it a shot.
Is anyone up for that?
I would be interested in it, but as you have said, whether it happens or not is up to aristo.
On the subject matter, who do you plan on being our bachelorette(s)? Did you want to give us multiple choices or have one given to us? Do you plan on pulling them/her from the same pool aristo had given us (with permission) or did you have someone else in mind?
Don't get us wrong, please believe, there have been similar sentiments on this side. There has been a fair amount of desire on this fanclub's behalf to write a one-off 'ode' to Aristo's novella, from a different viewpoint and choice perspective, but it really comes down to feeling 'icky' about violating the intentions of the original artist and their creation.
…that might sound like hyperbole, but -as- a writer first and foremost this is the general feeling held in that aspect, hence why the idea hasn't materialized on this end, though the thought certainly has.
Aristo sort-of has his own spinoff already, as it were. No disrespect intended and nothing personal with this opining, of course, simply responding to the circumstances and similar thoughts shared on a similar idea.
It really comes back to what Aristo's intentions are.
I was thinking of a mix. There would be choices of taking known people with us into war. For example Beatrice; she promised to save Edward's life. Do we take her up on that or do we leave her in the castle to keep our children save instead? That kind of choice.
But there will also be new people along the way as we move from battle to battle. I don't want to give away too much about the campaign I have in mind, but there will be grateful maidens whenever you save a town/village from the enemy and there will be widows in need of consoling in case when a battle is lost.
And I plan on rewarding tactical brilliance. There will be some "hidden features" in the story that you can unlock by choosing the right kind of tactic. Sometimes the reward is a female companion.
And of course winning the war will have big a reward.
But given that the story will take place in a parallel universe, I fully intend to make you work for it! There will be no plot armor and guaranteed wins.
Sorry, I have not been able to finish the update yet, but progress was made.>>6672
Really? All the previous threads are linked right at the top of the main thread. This includes an archive of the bbw-chan thread.>>6696
I have given this a lot of thought. My first instinct is that this story belongs to everyone. I have no ownership because your votes write it along with me. I certainly can't 'stop' someone from writing what they like about it. It would be silly to try. In that case, if someone wants to write their own take on the idea, that is fine.
There is only one concern I have. That is, if such a story was written, I would probably like to read it too. And if I were to read it too, I might see an idea I liked, I might think "I like that idea, I can expand on that and take that places," and want to copy it. That would not be fair. It'd be a much different situation from reading suggestions in the chat log or notes when readers vote. Therefore, I could not read it. However, it might be possible that a spin-off story of this nature would introduce some element to the game that I already planned on or that just develops naturally, and then it might 'seem' like I copied it, even though it was just a coincidence.
Perhaps if the premise was slightly changed or the characters were? For example, instead of starring Edward and Beatrice and Tharja, it could star 'aristocrat x' and 'witch x', and be set a few generations in the past in a pre-King Vlad Ruhemania. It could be a parallel universe where Ruhemania developed a little differently under the guidance of another aristocrat who rose to power instead of King Vlad, or some such thing.
Basically my only consideration is "if you want to, go ahead, but please change the world enough so there's never a problem of a conflict/overlap between the stories," just for the sake of avoiding this.>>6681
The thing to consider is that, like the priest told Edward, as the King, Edward is symbolically Ruhemania in human form. (Most) Everyone would be very invested in his safety and making sure he would not fall prey to an accident or even a simple bandit attack if he left the castle. That's not to say he can't leave the castle, or indeed, won't leave the castle, but he would certainly need an appropriate amount of guards and people to see to his needs if he were to travel. Of course, travel is definitely something Edward can do and may in fact get good opportunities to do in the future.
Please also consider the nature of the scenario that was voted: Ruhemania was always portrayed as a very remote, isolated country. Suddenly turning it into a trade empire or an important influence on foreign countries isn't necessarily impossible, but it wouldn't be easy and would take considerable investment. (Ricardo suggested one such method in the canonization of King Vlad as Saint Vlad.)
I followed the link to bbw chan i think its down
Very well. Until I (or someone else) finds a satisfying solution, the project is on hold.
I hope I never stifle someone's creativity so please do feel free if you have the idea.
I am also going to 'draw a line in the sand,' so to speak. There will be an update before April ends. (Hopefully not down to the last day.)
Thank you all very much for the well-wishes and warm reception. It is good to be back with you all.
I just thought of something. We know that Edward plus Beatrice has not resulted in a pregnancy and that tharja is interested in fertility magic.
What if Beatrice's trouble conceiving is supposed to push us towards making another large decision about the future of witchcraft in ruhemania (whether to allow human experimentation or not) and Edward's caught between his love of Beatrice/pregnancy and his morals about human experiments.
Beatrice already dismissed that notion four weeks ago saying basically "sometimes these things take time. don't be impatient, silly mortal"
What I'm getting at is that Beatrice's lack of pregnancy is actually caused by infertility (as a plot device) instead of the random chance of conception. It would be an interesting set up for another large plot point.
If Beatrice gets pregnant before it becomes an issue, that's fine by me and I'm wrong, but I think that it would be an interesting direction to take the story in.
(I came up with this based off of Edward's past exploits with quickly impregnating women).
Just so no one is waiting, I wanted to say I won't be able to post the next update until after Mother's Day.
Though after this scene we will enter the Summer Faire and I anticipate the action will move a little faster.
I hope you're look forward to it. I hope it's enjoyable.
Back when Vampires was (IS???) the general assumption *before* the Witch reveal, a mild musing was made regarding banging Tharja on her cycle/getting Ed-boy his red wings would *actually* end up impregnating her…who knows…maybe it works this way with Beatrice(???)
Also, tin foil hats on for the foot fetish pseudo-flood(???)
Just saying, kinda sad if someone actually tried to cheat their way for an option. Even if you like the foot fetish content, it still doesn't mean you should cheat for it.
My guess? Someone is trying to force it on everybody else, because if I remember correctly, one time this happened before. I think we all get a little suspicious when like ten new, random ID's just pop up.
And yeah, maybe we have to get our red wings before Beatrice gets pregnant. Sad we did not try it out.
As long as there is no hard proof of vote-rigging, I have to give the benefit of the doubt. I trust every reader to use their one vote to honestly convey what they want from the story.
Similarly, if ten people who have never voted before suddenly see there is a foot-fetish option and choose it, even if they never voted in the story before, that is fine, as long as it is one vote for each individual. Because I want anyone who reads this to be comfortable to 'join in' and use their one vote, whether that's by following the regular updates, or just at one particular point. (Of course, I'm very happy to have regulars to look forward to reading their opinions and ideas.)
But, to anyone who might think "I just want my choice to win and I'll vote more than once secretly to do it," please don't. I always try to take into account every vote, even if it doesn't win. Even if it's not immediately satisfied, this especially applies regarding sex scenes. There was one voting option a while back where Edward could ask Beatrice to restore her virginity with magic before they had sex. I offered this a few times, and it got a few votes, but never enough to win outright. Then I decided since there was enough people interested, I included it in one scene later on as a means of satisfying those voters, since no one also said "What a turn-off!" or some such thing.
Of course, I understand that. Obviously we can't just start some McCarthy trials over a few votes.
I like your direction with choices, your method of inserting ones which perhaps are not enough to gather votes on their own. It seems like a fair nod to those who lose in this winner take all system.
Aristo, a great as story as ever, thanks for writing it.
Apologies for not having an update yet.
We are entering a part of the story where all of the choices building up to it must come together and pay off at once.
My delay the previous month or so disrupted my rhythm with writing the update.
I must review the story this far and make sure I utilize every detail up to now.
Hopefully this will not take long. But that is why it has not updated yet.
Sorry for the wait on this. I know everyone has been very patient these past few months especially.
No prob just keep enjoying your work as you update them aristo!
Aristo, is it alright with you if our game can have the main character as one of King Edward's distant bastard sons?
I just got a note in my DA about something like this. Is that connected to this, Maxi?
Yes, I am the one who has sent you that note.
All right. You have my answer there too, but that's fine as long as everyone knows that the stories are separate and we are making no efforts to make sure they match up. Good luck, Maxi.
Not to be a pest, but it's been over a month since the last update. Everything OK?
Boo, not over a month, my bad.
Apologies for the wait.
The past week or so has not been kind to me in terms of creativity. I am working just will be slow.
If you follow my deviantart account, you may have seen my promise to have an update by today.
I would have preferred a substantial update with a full sex scene and choice ready, but that is not what I had time to put together.
Still, rather than delay it further, I made an update with what I was able to prepare.
The key to Impregnator Kings has been continuity. Being able to update consistently is what let this story develop for so long.
I very much want, and am aiming to, get in this rhythm again. Therefore even if it's a small update I still posted it with the expectation it will be easier to add to it than save it and continue to write off posting anything with "It's not ready."
I just wanted to let everyone know there was a reason, and perhaps it was better to state it here than on DA.
Thank you everyone for your patience and I hope the story comes back as an enjoyable read.