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I can only write about what works well for "me," but I believe I can offer some general tips.

First, have an editor/proof-reader. Even if it's just a friend to read it and say "I like it," or "This is bad." Someone you can listen to. With Impregnator Kings I'm lucky to have the voters from update to update. If you are writing your own private story or fanfiction you can either ask a friend or post your work and wait for reviews. But always be open to what they say.

It goes without saying you should also work on being a writer in general. At the very least, use spell-check, and if you're unsure of a grammar rule, google it. The Elements of Style is a great guidebook and is in the public domain. Google it. Read it. Follow it. Readers can tell when your writing is vague or sloppy and it can turn people off. This relates to my next advice:

Deliver.

This is for writing erotic stories in particular. Deliver, deliver, deliver.

When I first tried writing porn, I spent many paragraphs on a set up for a sex scene, and then I let myself become nervous and described it in one sentence as "Then we had sex and it was great," (paraphrasing). Don't do this. Atmosphere is very important. Build-up is important. Tension and pay off is important. But if you don't deliver, it will all come to nothing.

Describe pussy. Describe ass. Describe tits. Describe penis. Think of creative ways to say "penis goes into vagina," hundreds of times. Describe beautiful people. Describe attractive people.

You have to deliver.

If you can't let yourself write paragraphs about sex, then don't promise erotica. That's fine, though! You can still write good stories, even fetish stories, without actual sex. I've read very modest stories that were somehow more exciting than more explicit ones.

For descriptions of people, I sort of cheat and use images. If you are using only text, my advice is to give a general description of traits anyone would have (hair color, eye color, etc.) but then choose one detail to focus on. Something that makes them stand out. Anything at all. For erotica, exceptionally large breasts, hips, ass, etc. are appropriate. If you're describing another character who won't have sex, then something like "bushy eyebrows" or "thin lips" or "bony fingers," etc. will do just fine.

Be aware of "coding" for your characters. If you describe a character in any sort of sexual term, as beautiful, or any other positive aspect, the audience will expect sex to occur with them.

As for environments, I think a general sort of advice told to writers is very apt: take the first page of your short-story/novel and throw it away. No one needs to read long detailed descriptions of how green the trees grow. That's not what they're there for.

When it comes to describing the actual pregnancy, it sounds like you're halfway there in what you want to write. Look up testimonials through the internet. Real-life talk about what pregnant women feel are very helpful. Take inspiration, don't plagiarize. Consider the source, too. If you want a character who is overjoyed to be pregnant or addicted to pregnancy, look for something from a similar source.

My final advice is for fetish writing in general. Write what you personally enjoy. If what you're writing doesn't excite you, why would it excite anyone else? Hit all the notes. Drum-skin taut bellies. Big, rounded bellies. Huge navels which have popped out. Dark lines of linea nigra up and down her torso. Dark nipples on swollen breasts, filled with milk. It is all right to use tried-and-true formulas and descriptions when it comes to writing fetish stories. Do things "by the numbers," without being "paint by numbers."

My final advice is try to write a little each day, or you get in a habit of thinking "I'm so tired, I'll do it later," and then weeks have gone by.

Good luck, I hope this was helpful.

>>10602
Thanks for responding with so much advice!
The only thing I feel like I can't really do with that is have an editor/proofreader since I don't exactly have any friends I feel like I'd be comfortable showing this type of stuff too. Honestly the plan I had going in was when I was done I would just post it onto Deviantart since that's the big hub of that sort of stuff and from what I've seen people are pretty tolerant of mistakes there.
As for sex though looking back most of the stuff I was wanting to write actually doesn't have a lot, since a lot of it is like magical/sci-fi in origin.
The only question I really have then is how much should I dedicate into detailing the setting of the story itself, as I feel like it'd be sort of jarring just idly mentioning that a woman is on a spaceship by herself, like I feel like I have to have some sort of explanation for why she is that makes some sort of sense at least.

>>10603
There's an adage of "show, don't tell." Meaning if you can give some clue to the audience from inferences in the text that tends to work better than a direct statement. Rather than say "She was shy," you say things like "She flinched when approached and looked away, not meeting his eyes. When it was time for her to speak, she hesitated before mumbling an inaudible reply."

When you're working sci-fi, that's difficult because you have to let the reader know what "rules" you are using.

There's a reason authors use "Explaining things to an idiot," as a motif. Like when an outsider who is from a "low-tech" planet is brought onboard a starship and then the crew gives them an explanation because they're constantly asking things like "Why is there gravity? How are we breathing? What about food, and fuel, etc?" Try to think of a clever way to use that. But don't forget to make them characters. They have emotions. They will react to the world based on their world-view.

>>10604
Alright I see what you mean, ironically looking at what I had already done I was already doing that somewhat, however admittedly I did also have several paragraphs of just info-dumps that I could probably rewrite better, thanks for pointing that out!
Another question, if your willing to answer, how would you go about describing a pregnancy that was otherworldly in nature (alien, eldritch being, etc)? Some ideas I was going with was things like shorter gestation time, more frequent and harder movement, and larger fetus size.

>>10605
I tend to avoid these sorts of things because they don't appeal to me personally. But in a general sort of advice, I recommend you think always about the consequences. Not just describing the thing as itself, but causality. "This" therefore "what"?

If there is a fast-gestation going on, how fast? One of the symptoms of normal gestation is a rush of hormones, the ribs are stretched, the baby 'kicks' internal parts of the mother, etc. If this is all sped up, what are the consequences? The woman feels an incredible amount of constant rib pain, enough it's hard to breathe at times? Increased nausea? Her breasts balloon overnight? Remember mental and emotional changes besides physical. If the gestation takes so little time she wakes up more visibly pregnant than when she goes to sleep, it's going to have a body horror element and she would likely react with panic.

If you want to avoid this or take these issues in an opposite direction, give a consistent reason. The woman doesn't freak out because whatever alien hormones are rushing through her body are convincing her brain that this is "natural." It may not be biologically sound, so to speak, but if it's internally consistent with the world building, it is good writing. Just make sure it stays consistent.

Another thing to note is that, just like with drawing or any other form of artistic expression, the measure of your ability is not necessarily how "good" your first attempts come out, but also how willing you are to improve. The more I've written and get feedback, the more I improve.
But on the flip side, I've seen people who write badly and don't ask for any feedback (nor do they get it.) Their writing never progresses, and always stays bad, possibly even for decades.
Fortunately for you, you're asking questions, and I think aristocrat gave you a lot of good advice here. Asking yourself "why/how would this person react in this way in this situation?" is an ABSOLUTELY VITAL skill for a writer and cannot be stressed enough.

>>10607
This is true. Your writing is going to suck when you first try. Just as you are going to suck at anything when you first do it. That's okay. There will be parts that are good. Just learn to expand the good parts and change the bad.

And always practice good spelling and grammar.

>>10609
>>10607
Yeah, I guess I wouldn't really know how well things go until I post it. Still wish I had someone to look it over first to make sure I didn't make any obviously stupid mistakes though. Maybe I could ask one of the more prolific writers on DA to give it a quick read before posting it.

>>10601
>Any tips on writing stories would be welcome

There is thousands of real stories. If you want to create a new one, try to find, what are they is about. Do not look at the "reality". Rememba, colours are not exist, there is no sounds, all, that you can perceive, it is you. There is no point, how can you describe a story. A masterpiece always represents meeting with yourself. Your reader must not face with some kind of art. If you want to impress him, represent your inner world with unique way (sry 4 my broken english).

>to stuff like describing pregnancy feelings, fetal movement, contractions, etc

We all perceive reality almost the same way. Except some points. What do you feel, when you r watching someone, who was born with opposite sex? I think you r man, so you can find a women some kind of cute, sexy, or something else. But, she cant have this kind of feature. Only you can. All the features, that you can perceive is belongs to you. So, all that you can do is describe that you see. Dont find any doubds on it, cause that is all you can do with your intention. (eng is not my native, feel free to ask anything. I dont think my thoughts was explained clearely)

I've been intending to respond to this thread for several weeks now. One thing about writing, as with other creative endeavour, is that it can stay in the mind waiting for a burst like this. Even then, my response is an amalgamation of other conversations I've had, so in a way I've written much of this post months or years ago. Now I'm writing it over the course of just hours and I'll just have to make more posts as I realize things I've forgotten to note. My paragraphs are grouped appropriately, although the ordering thereof may be suboptimal.

I predominantly use Pregchan to host my stories, so I'm going to link to the two relevant threads, and then the posts containing the stories. I'd be grateful for any thoughts on them being posted in the second thread:
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I write pregnant My Little Pony fanfiction, so I don't tend to face some of the same issues others do, since anyone reading it is likely already familiar with the settings and characters. This allows me to focus almost exclusively on the interesting and unique details of the environment and characters.

What I stress first is focussing on the mechanics of the story, and not the dialogue. My stories tend to be light on dialogue, and I make a lot of it implicit to further emphasize only what I want to or can't reasonably avoid. I read a story someone commissioned which was dozens of pages of mostly generic dialogue, and I was astonished at how anyone liked it. I'm not going to link to it, but it has even had artwork of it made, and it was just a terrible story. There was little backstory, no real buildup, and it was just piling fetishes on top of one another.

Plenty of people probably think storytelling is for those who can't draw, but it's artistry all the same. Before I release my stories, I sleep, and then proofread. I've spent several hours contiguously, just proofreading. Never elide the proofreading; I've greatly added to some stories in this step, when I realized a scene could use something else, and when I was making the prose less generic. I wrote an eleven page story a few months back, and spent seven hours straight editing it. I spent around five hours editing an earlier story which was six pages, and made heavier and much more important changes than with the eleven page story.

Even with exhaustive proofreading, it's common to do it again later and notice another error or few. I intend to review my stories from last year and make any adjustments so I have an excuse to post them in the second thread I referenced. I'm an amateur linguist, and don't have any proofreading help, nor do I really use any automated tools; the only time I get any automatic help like this is when I put my story in another editor to typeset it, but it's very important to recognize that simple spellchecking won't notice when a word is spelled properly, when it should've been another, so I don't rely on it.

When starting a story, I tend to have a particular thought in mind which I want to describe in it, and this can be something as simple as how a pony struggles to get out of bed, to such things as magical mishaps leading to pregnancy or how a younger pony interacts with the mare.

I've thought before about why it is that drawings can be arousing without explicitly featuring anatomy or sex, but it seems most stories include detailed sex scenes for this. I believe it's the lack of focus on mechanics that causes this. A drawing can provide more than enough detail for the viewer to imagine things, and I believe a story which focusses on describing the mechanics can also do this. Few of my stories explicitly mention sex or particularly sexual anatomy, but I think they can still be arousing because of what I focus on. Compare this approach to stories which are mostly setups for sex scenes.

I produce PDF files, and presentation is very important. It's the difference between something that looks nice at a glance and something that doesn't, no different than with food. Proofreading is again very important here; when I read a story and see an amateur mistake, it really lowers my view of the work, especially if I were already deciding whether to continue reading or not. It can be unnerving to see all of the mistakes, but it's fine to write them, just not to leave them. Its not uncommon for me to correct several dozens of errors in proofreading. I don't feel I need to emphasize this further.

Discipline in writing can vary wildly. I find having a deadline for a group project I'm going to add my story to helps. For one of my better stories, I wrote a paragraph or two every day for three weeks, and yet I finished a different nice story in two days, because that's how much time I had when I learned of the project. I started writing a shorter story to get writing again, and it grew, and it's been over a month since I've touched it; it's almost finished and I just don't have the will to yet.

I read and write most every day, but I can't always focus on pregnancy erotica. The stories I've linked aren't everything. I took a break lasting several years, and returned much better than I'd been when writing greentext. If I'd not written and read so much in that interim, I wouldn't have improved.

Another thing to note is that improvement means most artists become dissatisfied with their earlier works. Even if the work were finished perfectly, the standards for judging them may be what change. I don't let it depress me, and don't suggest anyone else does either.

Here are some basic English rules:
Don't write "they" when a character's sex is known. Traditionally, the male pronoun is used when the sex is unknown, but I use the female pronoun in my stories because they're about ponies. I avoid plenty of English mannerisms that wouldn't fit, such as calling children "kids", because that word refers to goats. I also avoid mentioning "hands" in my work. Consider what English should be used for any stories. Don't write a high fantasy story and use idioms about technology or other things which don't exist in that world. Maintain the verisimilitude.

I don't use my thesaurus much, but I use it occasionally. Writing about anatomy without getting repetitive requires synonyms and metaphor, along with focussing on related anatomy and events. Learn a new word frequently, until this becomes too difficult to do on a daily basis. Part of the joy of reading something is coming across a new word, and having an excuse to learn it.

This is all of the advice I can muster for now.

>>10601
Here is my advice
-Be short and concise
-Dont use more than five words when two can do the trick
-Tell a story first
-do research first or consult medical professionals before writing a story about pregnant mothers

>>10926
I recalled something I'd forgotten to mention until now. We're familiar with the use of camera angles and other mechanisms in film to hide information from the viewer and, done well, the audience won't notice it until after what was being hidden becomes apparent.

It's very easy to do this with writing, as I did in my latest story, and I highly recommend keeping it in mind. It's a useful tool, to introduce an ambiguity or elide seemingly superfluous details, and to allow the mental image of the reader to be subtly shifted from the reality of the story.